First of all, thank you for your answr! And i have written it by my myself.
我要参加一个英语作文的比赛.这是我的参赛作文.The title is ”Success and failure.”请帮我修改一下,最后一节再翻译一下,thank you very much.
Success and Failure
People always hope everying can go smooghly in their life and fancy they can do a great job in their undertaking. But the world that we face not only have beautiful flowers, fragrant grass, fair days but also have strong wind, rainstorm, brambles. On the life stage,winners can always be seen,so it is not strange to see others succeed in each view.On the other hand, there are a large number of people have failed again and again. Face failure, we should learn how to endure it.Because we know if we don’t experience failure ,our success won’t sweet enough to taste.
Fan Zhong Yan said in his article : ”You shouldn’t happy by the enviroment and  sad by yourself.”(不以物喜,不以己悲.不知道我翻的对不对?)However it is difficult to do that. In the history,you can see so many literary authors had pent- up emotions and  were depressed when they  met  some difficulty.Jia Yi was the example of one of them. But you can also see the people who had staunch confidence to fight with the uncomfortable conditions. They analysed the gain and the loss,the advantages and the disadvantages carefully;they persevered at last. Cao Xue Qin ,who was very poor in life,used ten years’ prvations to create one of the famous writings-------(红楼梦,不知怎么翻) in China. If Jia Yi had the persistence in literature and a litter more optimism, he would have left more excellent work,too.
  We often heard that the students will be decadent after they failure in their exams. I think they are lack of confidence .If I were they, I would say to myself :”Come on! You are the best! Don’t give up.” Because success needs patient ,challenge ,confidence ,opportunity, of course, good foundation.It consists of so many factors.So we should try harder and harder, not losing heart,after that we can achieve our goals. Remember : it is not hobbile for a person to make mistakes.In other words,to recognizee and correct it is the most important thing to do.
  Once I heard a story .It is siad that there was an old man who sat beside a river all day and he angled for a big fish in the end. But he let the fish go to the river again before he went home. His explanation was the thing he had angled for was relaxed and quiet. It is obvious that he didn’t want fishes.Opposite , he liked to enjoy the whole process.Compare with the process,success or failure is not very important .I like to share with my parents and friends the enthusiasm,sweet time that I had in my studying.
   金字塔顶的风景是很美,每个人很想登上人生的金字塔,实现自己的价值,达到生命的至高点.然而,并非每个人都能如愿以偿. But confidence equal miracle!

Success and Failure
People always hope everying can go smooghly(smoothly) in their life and fancy they can do a great job in their undertaking(career). But the world that we face not only have (has)beautiful flowers, fragrant grass, fair days but also have (has)strong wind, rainstorm,(and) brambles. On the life stage,winners can always be seen,so it is not strange to see others succeed in each view.On the other hand, there are a large number of people (who)have failed again and again. Face(facing) failure, we should learn how to endure it.Because we know if we don’t experience failure ,our success won’t (be)sweet enough to taste.
Fan Zhong Yan said in his article : ”You shouldn’t happy by the enviroment and sad by yourself.”(不以物喜,不以己悲.不知道我翻的对不对?)However it is difficult to do that. In history,you can see so many literary authors had pent- up emotions and were depressed when they met some difficulty.Jia Yi was the example of one of them. But you can also see the people who had staunch confidence to fight with the uncomfortable conditions. They analysed the gain and the loss,the advantages and the disadvantages carefully;they persevered at last. Cao Xue Qin ,who was very poor in life,used ten years’ prvations to create one of the famous writings-------(红楼梦（dream of the red chamber）,不知怎么翻) in China. If Jia Yi had the persistence in literature and a litter more optimism, he would have left more excellent work,too.
We often heard that the students will be decadent after they failure in their exams. I think they are lack of confidence .If I were they, I would say to myself :”Come on! You are the best! Don’t give up.” Because success needs patient ,challenge ,confidence ,opportunity, of course, good foundation.It consists of so many factors.So we should try harder and harder, not losing heart,after that we can achieve our goals. Remember : it is not hobbile for a person to make mistakes.In other words,to recognizee and correct it is the most important thing to do.
Once I heard a story .It is siad that there was an old man who sat beside a river all day and he angled for a big fish in the end. But he let the fish go to the river again before he went home. His explanation was the thing he had angled for was relaxed and quiet. It is obvious that he didn’t want fishes.Opposite , he liked to enjoy the whole process.Compare with the process,success or failure is not very important .I like to share with my parents and friends the enthusiasm,sweet time that I had in my studying.
金字塔顶的风景是很美,每个人很想登上人生的金字塔,实现自己的价值,达到生命的至高点.然而,并非每个人都能如愿以偿. But confidence equal miracle!
I read your article. In general, I can understand what you mean and however, frankly
speaking, you really need to improve your skill of writing. First, I suggest you
write by yourself and not do it with the help of the dictionary. Second, don't write in
Chinese and then do the translating. On the one hand, it takes time and one the other
hand, your article will lose the flavor of English and of course will not be readable.
Still, your vocabulary is not that large. If you do it with the help of a dictionary, you
have to special attention to function of words. If not, you will surely makes
grammatical mistakes.So I advise you to do it in English. (直接用英语写，不要先写汉语再翻译）